BA (HONS) Computer Animation Arts at UCA Rochester.
OGR 19/11/2015Evening Ben,This is a very crisp, very architectural scene - the only issue I have is that I don't know what I'm looking at, and even though you've told me what the view is of and where it's from, I still can 'read' it as a space. It has no centre or focal point I can determine, though I'm drawn to the red and white elements, but I don't know what they are. I'm also confused as to the matte painting element, because I don't understand why there appears to be 3 separate strips of skyline. Don't misunderstand me; there's a lot of quality here, your orthographs are presented cleanly, and in regards to Pugh, the attention to detail in terms of the surfaces etc. is nicely observed... it's just, compositionally, the image you've provided here doesn't explain itself. It's like someone has taken a photograph of a landmark building, but framed it in such a way as to vanish any sense of how it is situated in space, or how it relates to the elements around it. It's clear from your production art that the 'rest' of these structures are designed and exist, so I think you need to reconsider this composition completely to ensure that your resulting digital set makes more sense compositionally. I think you're using Maya block-outs in order to derive these very crisp, perspectival images; if so, it should be relatively straightforward for you to offer up some alternative compositions without getting into too much detail; you need to make your elements work together satisfyingly as a space, and right now, your current composition isn't working.